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She drew herself a bath
Since no one would for her

Candles or lights?
She chose the former

Struck a match with her hands
Ignored the sweet scent 

Stared at the flames 
Then into the bathtub she went

The water was scalding
But she forced herself to take it

Besides, she'd take long
And the warm water had to make it

The one who said he loved her
Was so preoccupied 
That he had no idea hours had gone by

When he was ready for bed 
He found she wasn't out
And she needed to be,
there were hungry kids running about

There were dishes to wash
And laundry to do
And when he went to sleep 
She couldn't sleep too

He went towards the bathroom
The door locked when he got there
So he got their makeshift key:
An alligator clip from her hair

He unlocked the door
since when he knocked: no replies
Then his heart skipped a beat
over the scene before his eyes

He unknowingly steps over
A bare rose stem on the floor
His mind not ready
to accept the awaiting gore

He rushed to the one
he said "I love you" to
And when he saw she was breathing,
his heartbeat renewed 

What he thought had been blood
Were just petals from a rose
In his relief he missed
what was right under his nose

He gently awoke her,
and she quickly pulled out the drain
In that dim candlelight
the water always looked the same

He handed her a towel and went off to bed
And that was that, nothing more unsettled his head

He'd not seen the  ice cubes, and he had missed-
aside from the cup-
The cuts on her wrist

She had tucked a small object behind the shampoo on the ledge,
Her bathrobe hid all the cuts on her legs

Once again she puts on her invisible makeup
of a happy mom and wife
And every day she wipes it off
when she tries to end her life
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Wrote this in my head, then jotted it down and here it is. Hopefully no one can relate to it-but I know there are people who do relate to it... Sometimes, even the people we live with don't know us, and sometimes someone's life appears to be something it's not. Especially when they suffer in silence
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Mood: Love ~heavenlytouch Apr 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so dark and emotional piece ! I love this one very much ! Hundred thumbs for you ! :clap:
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thank you, love :thanks: :huggle: Im so glad you enjoyed
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Mood: Love ~heavenlytouch Apr 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: You're welcome. :huggle:
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~pikalatias46 Apr 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
It has a dark beauty to it. Very good perspective on such a horrible and sad topic. But I love your work :love:
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thank you very much my love :thanks:

I wanted to juxtapose something beautiful with something not so beautiful, that shared a similarity of some kind. I have other poems around and in my head that include or are about a darker rose theme to them, I think that is how I feel about roses. I love them, especially the red ones, but I also acknowledge a darker side to them-according to my poems. I wouldn't have noticed I felt that way at all if I wasn't gathering my work in once place like DA.
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~pikalatias46 Apr 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I totally agree with you!! you never really know to what extent you express yourself until you show it to others.
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So sad, but I know that this is the reality of so many housewives. They live miserable and pretend they are happy. They die inside so many times a day.
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yeah :( I wasn't going to include the identity of a housewife at all, but it came right at the very end. I think it made the poem a little more eye-opening and tragic, since housewives in particular could get very depressed and feel so anonymous and even more so with children involved but not many people realize they can fall to these feelings as well--it added more depth to the subject. Plus, I wanted to hint at the fact that parents very much do feel like this sometimes, not just heartbroken lovers or adolescents not coping with the trials of their youth. It can happen right smack in the middle of a bustling family, and even being surrounded with responsibility and family, one can still feel very unneeded and left out of love. The housewife who is usually the symbol of a stable and happy home life felt like a strong character to drive all these points home right at the end. Thanks so much for reading :huggle:
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